Redthroat Dragonfang (Griffon)

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Redthroat Dragonfang (Griffon)

Post by Summerset on Fri May 03, 2013 1:10 am

=Information=
Name: Major Redthroat Dragonfang
Species: Griffon
Gender: Male
Age: 105
Occupation: Griffon Drill Sergeant-- Retired; Manehattenite
Virtue/Vice: Progressive Loyalist
Minor Talents: Eyeballing, Terrifying Presence, Combatives, Flight
Alignment: Griffons

=Appearance=
Height: 5’9”
Coat Color: White
Mane/Tail Color: Red
Eye color: Gold



Picture:



=Bio=
Personality:


Redthroat has fought for his Emperor, and served his
time, and just wants some peace and quiet in the land he won. He is a quiet
griffon, tending to ignore rather than attack the ponies who are unfortunate to
see him. He has even been noted to forgive a foal that bumped into his leg. As
far as griffons go, he is much better than Feliks.





However, that isn’t to say that he’s disloyal. He will
still fight for his Emperor if called upon, but only for him. He butts heads
with the paranoid Feliks over many of his acts, and his own soldiers are loyal
only to him. If Feliks is ever taken down, Manehatten had better hope somegriffon
like Redthroat takes the seat of power.

History:


Born into the Halden Duchy, from an offshoot of the main
family, the Dragonfangs were distinguished and loyal soldiers since the
beginning of the Empire. When he was young, he was taught in the noble’s skills
of reading and writing, as well as chivalry, the arts, and all the other fine
skills expected of him. Unlike most noble families, however, he was a
Dragonfang, and was therefore taught in the practice of war.





Everyday had long flights and runs around the Duchy, and
at a young age he started to participate in hunts and fights. It was a tough
life, and he lost three siblings in the process. At last, he stood the toughest
and the greatest fighter amongst his surviving two brothers. From beak to claw
he was covered in small scars, and he had powerful muscles under his feathers.
He could run all day and fly around the city without breaking a sweat. He was
trained with the sword and spear, and knew many military tactics.





When he joined the military, he completed his training
quickly and without difficulty, starting out as a simple private. For many
years he fought in skirmishes and tournaments, sometimes winning, sometimes not. He nearly
lost his life many times, and had to claw his way to a sergeant. In the first
year of the war, he was deployed to Stalliongrad and Canterlot respectively.
After the loss at Canterlot, he was chosen to be removed from the frontlines
and given the task of training new recruits.





In the training camps he was feared by every recruit.
Unlike the other loud and red-faced sergeants, he was quiet and had a glare
that could freeze any private in his steps. He trained many recruits throughout
the war, never again participating in war. When the war was officially won, he
retired as a trainer at the rank of Major. He was an old griffon by this time,
over a century old. He deployed to the Manehatten HQ as the last term of his
military career. It was supposed to be a quiet life in the conquered land, but
Manehatten is anything but.





With a company of soldiers under his command and Feliks
breathing down his neck, he is finding it harder and harder to keep his
patience. He will never betray his Emperor, but he may exact a judgment call
and remove the foolish commander of duty.



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Re: Redthroat Dragonfang (Griffon)

Post by Steel Strike on Sun May 05, 2013 6:55 pm

I'm sorry Wist. This character is just...too perfect. Please make him less OP. Wrestling Dragons, and being bored and then being the "Perfect Hunter" is just too much. There's no struggle, no meaning just an extremely strong character that doesn't seem to be devolpable. There's no room for improvement. It's just this character that doesn't seem much more than a very big and immovable wall. He has a bit too much skill in most jobs.

For imptovement, give him struggles, instead of being just this cruel body that performs nothing but heinous acts give him a story as to how he got that way. Also, just tone down hos power by a lot. Dragons aren't creatures you easily fight, and kids don't normally wander off into the forest and become experts in the outdoors. That's my recommendation for getting this app passed.
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Re: Redthroat Dragonfang (Griffon)

Post by Steel Strike on Sun May 12, 2013 4:50 pm

I can say that if you do intend to replace Feliks you will have an uphill battle with it. We have Feliks in place for a reason, and it will take alot to tear him down(If staff allows it). That being said he's much better than before. Accepted, provided you take off a vice/virtue or two.
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