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Post by See no evil on Sun Mar 17, 2013 2:36 am

=Information=
Name: See no evil
Species: Unicorn
Gender: Male
Age: 14
Occupation: Self proclaimed "Villain"
Virtue/Vice: Loyal to friends/ Is a big(and vary good) lair.
Special Talent: Sound magic
Minor Talents: Can carry up to three objects via telekinesis
Alignment: Undecided

=Appearance=
Height:
4ft 3in
Coat Color: Green
Mane/Tail Color: yellow
Eye color: cyan (never takes off his shades)
Cutie/Glyph Mark: blank flank (Hides it under an over cote)

Picture: W.I.P.

=Bio=
Personality: See no evil (or S.N.E. for short) is best described in one word, eccentric. He has a large amount of "honer" for the most part, and by that, he douse not kill any unarmed beings, and makes shore that he has a good reason to do crimes. He hates to admit it but he has a large sense of justice, and tends to be a bit of a robin hood like pony. Has a love for jazz music, and plans to be the best Villain in the history of the world. He always has optimistic outlook on life.
Has no family.

History: See no evil has been an orphan ever seance the war, and had to raise himself ever since.

Special Skills/Abilities/Spells Descriptions: survival skills, sound magic, good cook


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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by Syron on Sun Mar 17, 2013 2:58 am

I already love that char! xD

Saying that would already be reason enough to post, but there are two more things:
- You surprised me when you suddenly used "he" in the personality, after seeing the pic I thought it's a mare. Usually stallions have the more edged faces, I would expect that there's some confusion if you keep it that way.
- Some spelling mistakes. I've seen much worse, and it might only be typos, but I suggest letting some program check over it anyway, takes care of most of it.

Can't wait to see him in action!
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by See no evil on Sun Mar 17, 2013 3:15 am

OK, should be good for now but i still think some things are off, so leaving it here for now.
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by Steel Strike on Sun Mar 17, 2013 9:27 am

I realize your char wants to keep himself secret or whatever, but know the eye and cutie mark should be stated. Nothing to hide from the people approving your character, right? xD
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by See no evil on Mon Mar 18, 2013 11:08 pm

i think its ready.
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by Steel Strike on Mon Mar 18, 2013 11:10 pm

I need a bit more than a sentence or two in the history. At least 2 paragraphs for History AND Personality. Though you could split up the personality if you wanted. And an explanation as to why he's a blank flank would be excellent.
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by Void on Tue Mar 19, 2013 7:59 am

Maybe because he's only fourteen? When do ponies get their cutie marks?
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by Steel Strike on Tue Mar 19, 2013 8:04 am

The Void wrote:Maybe because he's only fourteen? When do ponies get their cutie marks?

Around Elementary School. Certainly before 14. And he's a little big for 14 as well. He looks like a Saddle Arabian I think!
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by Prism on Tue Mar 19, 2013 9:50 am

well there could be those that don't get them till there older be rare but I am sure still possible. With how his life is maybe not had the chance to find what he is good at as busy trying to stay alive.
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Post by Steel Strike on Tue Mar 19, 2013 9:58 am

Steel Prism wrote:well there could be those that don't get them till there older be rare but I am sure still possible. With how his life is maybe not had the chance to find what he is good at as busy trying to stay alive.

He seems less focused on finding his special talent, and staying alive,and more on becoming "The greatest villain."

Someone that secure with themselves and still a blank flank? Just silly.
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by See no evil on Tue Mar 19, 2013 6:37 pm

Steel Strike wrote:
Steel Prism wrote:well there could be those that don't get them till there older be rare but I am sure still possible. With how his life is maybe not had the chance to find what he is good at as busy trying to stay alive.

He seems less focused on finding his special talent, and staying alive,and more on becoming "The greatest villain."

Someone that secure with themselves and still a blank flank? Just silly.
your both right. It's a mix of both.
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by See no evil on Tue Mar 19, 2013 6:39 pm

Steel Strike wrote:
Around Elementary School. Certainly before 14. And he's a little big for 14 as well. He looks like a Saddle Arabian I think!
I'm not the bast at the pony maker OK.
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by Steel Strike on Tue Mar 19, 2013 6:42 pm

See no evil wrote:
Steel Strike wrote:
Around Elementary School. Certainly before 14. And he's a little big for 14 as well. He looks like a Saddle Arabian I think!
I'm not the bast at the pony maker OK.

Don't worry. Just focus on your history and making your personality more diverse.
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Re: See no evil<WIP>

Post by See no evil on Tue Mar 19, 2013 6:45 pm

Steel Strike wrote:
See no evil wrote:
Steel Strike wrote:
Around Elementary School. Certainly before 14. And he's a little big for 14 as well. He looks like a Saddle Arabian I think!
I'm not the bast at the pony maker OK.

Don't worry. Just focus on your history and making your personality more diverse.
OK, working on it.
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